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Having too much dialogue within the story, particularly if the scenes contain a spitfire kind of discourse between people that can make the reader feel pummelled over the head such as the following example:
“What do you mean by that?” he demanded
“It wasn’t how it sounded,” she whispered.
“I’m going,” he said leaving.
Another culprit is allowing dialogue to leak into the story that serves no purpose, such as chitchat about the weather or small talk (unless, of course, it is to reveal character or convey an atmosphere).
Or dialogue that serves only to impart information for the purposes of the plot, such as:
“Yes, must have been two years at least.”
“Before the accident wasn’t it?”
The following also should be looked out for when improving character dialogue:
- Hackneyed words or expressions that only a stereotype would utter, or words that seem too dramatic or more suited to a soap or pantomime.
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